charcharbinx (![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} charcharbinx) wrote in lapsus_deus, |
All of the entries to the story are very good and interesting, and I can tell you did quite a bit of research to make the story as true as possible.. However, the entries are becoming a bit monotonous. The survivors seem to be back on their feet now, so they should be encountering a few actual problems. Why not add more about the ruffians that were in the previous entry? How about have whomever dropped the bomb send some armed guards to the ruins? The story is great, but I feel it needs a bit of drama and action added to the mix to keep it alive.
